now it's working...let's give this a go...

in close to the knives, there is so much imagery. using colorful words to describe the surroundings and situations always gets me hooked. adjectives are my best friend, we connect quickly. this is because when i see those descriptive words, i can imagine the scene and the characters and they play the story in my mind.

the other thing i noticed is, what was with the whale facts? how they are, what seems to be, randomly placed in the story just confuses me a bit. why would you put random facts in a story that has nothing to do with the plot? i don't understand.

which leads to the structure. with the random what facts and the long paragraphs give a sense of rambling...like the narrator isn't really sure what is going on in his life and he'll talk to anyone that will listen to him. not going to lie, it drives me crazy a little bit as he beats around the bush.